Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
Opinions are divided on whether the top rank to improve a
country
is economic Use synonyms
progess
or there are plenty types of Correct your spelling
progress
progress
that have to concern for Use synonyms
developed
Add an article
a developed
country
. Personally, I am in agreement with the latter view, even though the other one Use synonyms
also
shows some obvious advantageous points.
The option Linking Words
to
economic Change preposition
for
progress
is the most important goal Use synonyms
is
attractive for some reasons. First of all, Correct word choice
and is
budget
of the Add an article
the budget
a budget
country
Use synonyms
Add a missing verb
is bases
bases
on Correct your spelling
based
Correct article usage
the economic
economic
of the Replace the word
economy
country
alot and governments improve many problems that happening in the present day Use synonyms
such
as Linking Words
residents
Change noun form
residents'
resident's
life
, international liabilities, Fix the agreement mistake
lives
constuctions
and so on. Correct your spelling
constraints
Secondly
, it is dangerous for Linking Words
low
economic Add an article
the low
Use synonyms
country
because Fix the agreement mistake
countries
military
has to be strong and sustainable in order to protect the Add an article
the military
country
Use synonyms
while
it needs Linking Words
strong
Correct article usage
a strong
economic
. Replace the word
economy
For example
, Linking Words
countries
with strong military forces like Russia, Use synonyms
North
Korea are always ready when anything threatens their Correct word choice
and North
country
.
Use synonyms
However
, I believe it is more beneficial to improve Linking Words
other
Fix the agreement mistake
others
progress
equally. Use synonyms
Besides
, a strong economy Linking Words
based
on plenty of things which Add a missing verb
is based
is grow
and developed education, politics, Change the verb form
is growing
is grown
widely
commercial contact Replace the word
and wide
such
as Linking Words
USA
, Japan, Correct article usage
the USA
China
as Correct word choice
and China
a
developed Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
countries
Use synonyms
and
these factors above are really strong and imaging Correct word choice
apply
Use synonyms
country
with only strong economic Fix the agreement mistake
countries
progress
which leads to violence, guilty. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, these problems are rampant in most developing and undeveloped Linking Words
countries
and they are the number one cause of social unrest. Use synonyms
In addition
to solving these problems, Linking Words
countries
have to achieve development in the fields of education, healthcare, science and technology.
In conclusion, Use synonyms
while
the Linking Words
most
goal is economic Correct quantifier usage
apply
progress
, it seems to me that a strong and sustainable Use synonyms
country
has to Use synonyms
base
on plenty of factors.Wrong verb form
be based
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