The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in different years.

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The charts illustrate gadgets which were used by young minds to watch

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in Canada in a decade from 2009 to 2019.

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, what can be visible from the graph is that conventional

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users experienced a downward trend

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flat screen

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consumer

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witnessed an upward trend. Another interesting feature is that in a decade the number of mobile phone and tablet watchers increased whilst laptop and desktop computer viewers decreased. Looking into the details of watchers,

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and 2019 the share of flat screen viewers

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8% and 27% respectively.

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the usage of conventional

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youngesters

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youngsters

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the top method in 2009 that accounted for 34% (more than a third)

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in 2019 only utilized

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equipment in

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amount (4%, less than one in twenty). Moving to the data of consumers which can be

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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4 paragraphs

139 words

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The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in different years.

Some people think that the teenagers should concentrate on all subjects at school. Others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject they are best at or they are most interested in. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In some countries today, people are having their first child when they are older. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?