Some parents think that helping their children with homework is a good idea. Others believe children should do their homework on their own. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks clarity in its structure. It's important to clearly organize your essay into an introduction that outlines your argument, body paragraphs that discuss each view, and a clear conclusion summarizing your opinion. Additionally, aim to connect your ideas using linking words and phrases to ensure the logical progression of concepts.
task achievement
The task response could be strengthened by a clearer expression of the main points and a more consistent effort to address the prompt. Your opinion should be stated explicitly in the introduction as well as the conclusion, with a stronger focus on a balanced discussion of both views throughout the essay. Make sure your arguments and examples are directly relevant to the question and contribute to a full answer.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?