The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

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The map below illustrates the location of schools in 2004 and the program for changes that have been considered until 2024. It can be seen that

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the most significant changes would be

added

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another

school

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building and

second

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a second

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parking lot.

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Also

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the changes exceeded the student's attendance in 2024. In 2004, the proportion of students were 600 and there were two

school

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buildings where

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different

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a different

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side of the path.

also

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, there

were

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sport

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field building

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of the route connected to the main entrance where there was a parking lot next to it. In 2024, the population of pupils is anticipated to reach 1000 through the replacement

sport

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field building with the third

school

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building. Original buildings will be

joint

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together and connected with the new building through a path. The second parking lot will be constructed that would connect the main gate with a road which is behind the

school

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building 2 and There would be

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a sport

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sport

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field across that road next to the car park 2 which caused some deforestation.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

176 words

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The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024.

Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals and that this money could be better spent on the human population . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Your landlord is asking to increase the rent. Write a letter to him. In your letter, you should tell: •why you think the rent shouldn't be increased •what you will do if it is increased

Some people think that individuals today are more dependent on each other. Others believe people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Discuss both views and give your opinion.