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The charts below give information on the agesof the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the agesof the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare and contrast the
percentage
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 of different age groups in
Yemen
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 and Italy both
previous
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the previous
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population
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populations
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 in 2000 and
expected
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the expected
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population
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 in 2050.
Overall
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, the prediction of
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population
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the population
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 for these both countries is that the first biggest
percent
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 will belong to 15-59
years
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.
In addition
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, Italy had the same age group
which
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apply
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15-59
years
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 in 2000, the highest
percentage
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 was 0-14 ages in
Yemen
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 in the same year. In 2000, the
population
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 who were 0-14
years
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 old was 50.1% being the highest in
Yemen
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,
on the contrary
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, the same age group in Italy
was
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 the smallest
percentage
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 with 14.3%. The people who were between 15 and 59
years
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 old
was
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were
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 over the half
population
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 at 61.6% in Italy.
While
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 the
population
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 of 15-59 ages people was
second
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a second
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 biggest group, it
will be
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 expected to become first in 2050 in
Yemen
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.
Moreover
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, the
population
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 of 60 and above
will
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is
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predicted to nearly double from 2000 to 2050. In
Yemen
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, it is projected that the
percentage
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 of 15-
59
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59-year-olds
years
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 old will increase to 57.% and the
percentage
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 of 0-14
years
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 old people will decrease.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, yemen, population, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age distribution
  • demographics
  • populations
  • projections
  • trends
  • percentages
  • age groups
  • youthful
  • aging population
  • median age
  • shifts
  • dramatic changes
  • elderly
  • working-age population
  • dependency ratio
  • fertility rate
  • life expectancy
  • baby boomers
  • demographic transition
  • geriatric
  • adolescents
  • juveniles
  • seniors
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