More and more people are using internet to do their tasks rather that doing in person for example shopping bankings hotel bookings. Do you think tha advantage outweigh disadvantage

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people rely on
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internet
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for their
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activities
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their own. In my opinion, the disadvantages are not overshadowing the advantages.
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, there always exists some side effects on over usage of things.
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is
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introduced to the world in
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before which all
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dependent on mankind for doing daily activities
such
as grocery shopping, bill payments, net banking and so on.
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the introduction of
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, it became very easy for
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individual to complete their tasks or
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schedules
more flexibly. It helped
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time management,
convenience
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and convenience
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in doing the tasks. It not just helped
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busy people but
also
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people who are disabled, single
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, old
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and so on. If a person is
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and fit, he or she could go out and shop for the things needed and complete their requirements but if a person is disabled or aged
then
he would go for asking a favor from others. By
internet
, he could do things on his own and be
self dependent
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. There are more
such
scenarios like in emergencies where even during the odd times, we could get
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medicines,
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from doctors.
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of
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is a game changer in educational
inductory
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institutions
where it helps many students,
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and scholors
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scholors
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scholars
to preserve the data and makes
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it accessable
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accessable
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accessible
for
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research.
This
helps in creating
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tomorrow than yesterday. Apart from advantages there
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few
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disadvantages of using
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. Any technology is helpful until it is used minimally. In ancient times, we
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out for shopping of clothes where we could examine the texture, quality and
fiitings
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fittings
fitting
. The culture is not
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now, we
dont
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don't
get the opportunity to feel them as we buy them online. we compromise
instead
of getting the better products. We have come through a long and It's not just limited to the fashion industry but
also
spread wildly through the food industry and indeed resulted in
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safety and security issues as well. One should know that
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traditional practices cannot always
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by
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technologies.
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, taking the best out of it and limiting
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ourselves
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from
over doing
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can help to be social and secure.
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