The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities as well as the population distribution in urban and rural areas.
The bar chart compares the
citizen’s
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citizen
rate
and separation of metropolitan and countryside among Tokyo
, New York
, Shanghai
, Bombay
and Jakarta
in different years, 1970, 1990, 2010
.
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and 2010
Overall
, it is glaringly obvious that the figures of
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largest
cities saw Correct article usage
the largest
dramatic
increase during the shown period. Interestingly, the growth in the Add an article
a dramatic
population
of Tokyo
and Bombay
was seen higher
rates than others.
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it is clear that
in 1970, while
the most urbanization
was about 16 m
and 14 m
accordingly
in Tokyo
and New York
, the third ranked
city in the Add a hyphen
third-ranked
population
rate
was Shanghai
with its
over 12 Correct pronoun usage
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m
people. Moreover
, Bombay
and Jakarta
had shown only
less than 5m people in their Rephrase
apply
urbanization
rate
in the initial year.
According to
the charts, it can be seen that by 1990 the population
distribution in rural and urban areas of the largest cities had been
grown rapidly in Unnecessary verb
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Bombay
, Jakarta
and Tokyo
while
the number of
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urbanization
rate
rose gradually between roughly 1m and 2m in New York
and Shanghai
. Eventually, in 2010, Tokyo
and Bombay
were first and second ranked
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growth
of the Add an article
the growth
population
with the result
28m and 27m respectively. Another main point is that the amount of Fix the agreement mistake
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urbanization
in Jakarta
and Shanghai
rose dramatically to their peak and showed numbers over than
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while
New York
saw the result only
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