Although nowadays people are reading news through internet, newspaper still remain of values. Do you agree or disagree?

These days more and more
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values. In
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we will discuss both sides
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logically and methodically Nowadays the usage of
internet
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for
news
has experienced
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increase.The reason why
people
use
internet
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is their availability and flexibility. As an
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there are numerous
news
channels on social media platforms. They inform us
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latest
news
which
currently
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happened
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because of them we can stay informed anytime. But there are some drawbacks which
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to
take
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into
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account
such
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and worse impacts on our health.
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more screen time could lead to weakness
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visual skills and sleep
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which can be harmful
for
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us.
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there are many
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informations
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information
on the internet which can be
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people
.
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have remained its value year
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year. Mostly paper
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used by elderly
people
. Owing to the fact that Many
people
rely on newspapers for their daily dose of
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of information because of them they can enhance their knowledge and know about foreign cultures. And they can use it for entertainment through quizzes and puzzles. In
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there are many cons of online
news
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but the drawbacks
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