Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favor of them because of their benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is true that medicines and cosmetic products are tested on
animals
before, they are cleared for human use. I would like to write about a few developments
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medicines from animal experimentation.
To begin
with, opponents of
this
statement,
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strongly believe that
animals
have equal rights to live as humans. It is undeniable and
unmoral
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immoral
that
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animals
for medical research,
moreover
, we give them many diseases because of experiments.
For instance
, we have been using laboratory mice for many
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drugs in order to save
human's
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life
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and cure
disease
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.
In
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we are utilizing
animals
,
such
as rabbits and apes, for even beauty products which
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not essential to human health condition.
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almost 97
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of
animals
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died end of the experiment and it is more than 110 million
animals
in
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On the other hand
, supporters of the mentioned practice are convinced that
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could outweigh the concerns. Most importantly, it is true that there are alternative methods of research to replace animal testing, yet they are not reliable.
Additionally
, despite some ethical concerns for
animals
, a certain amount of suffering can be justified if human lives are saved. Thanks to animal experiments, there are uncountable successful developments in the medical field. In conclusion, experiments
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laboratory
animal
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animals
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are
unethical
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an unethical
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and cruel thing to all species of
animal
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animals
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.
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,
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are outweighed
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drawbacks
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in my view. In
further
, we have to minimize
animals
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suffering and testing for these
animals
as much as possible.
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