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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table gives information about the change of
people
 who went
for
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 international travel (1990,1995,2000 and 2005) million. Units are measured in numbers.
Overall
, Europe
people
 travelled higher than that
of
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in
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africa
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Africa
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,
america
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America
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,
asia
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Asia
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 and the
pacific
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Pacific
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 and
middle
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the middle
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 east.
mostly
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Mostly
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 all the countries
people
 travelled in 2005
while
 in
the
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1990 the least
people
 travelled. In
the
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terms of
africa
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Africa
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 around 18.2
people
 travelled
international
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on
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this
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opposed to exactly 9.8 in
middle
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 east. The
africa
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African
Africa
people
 travelled more than
that
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the
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middle
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Middle
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east
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Eastern
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people
. In terms of
europe
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Europe
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 around 280.2
people
 travelled
international
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internationally
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 on
this
opposed
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as opposed
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 to
exactly
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apply
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american
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America
 and
asia
 and the
pacific
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Pacific
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. In
american
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America
American
 most
of
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the
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apply
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people
 travelled
international
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internationally
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 in 2005. In
Asia
 and the
pacific
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Pacific
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people
 travelled
international
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internationally
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 around
the
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135 in 2005.
Overall
 from all the countries(
africa
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Africa
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,
american
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America
,
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Asia
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asia
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Asia
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 and the
praific
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pacific
prolific
europe
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Europe
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 and
middle
east)
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east),
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 many
people
 travelled
international
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internationally
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 693.7 in 2005
Submitted by manthrirajeevchakravarthi on

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, africa, asia, middle with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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