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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The expenses for different European nations on health sector with respect to their respective country's GDP in given in the bar chart for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Switzerland
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had the highest fraction of health expenditure in ratio to its GDP
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in all the years 2002, 2007 and 2012 and
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France was the doing the same in 2007 with 11% but the spending was less in 2002 and 2012.
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, other countries like Denmark, Norway, Luxembourg, Netherlands, Slovenia, Belgium and Spain had similar
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 of spending
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 the medical field with
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about 9%
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 average.
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, Estonia had the lowest percentage of expenditure with only 3% of the total GDP in all these given years. The countries like Estonia, Lithuania and Poland didn't have the same focus
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 health as their
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. Poland was only averaging about 6% and only 5% for Lithuania.
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