The graphs below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates
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information comparison rates of secondary and higher
education
among people in various parts of the world. The
first,
secondary
education
by
region
and
gender
in various parts of the world in 2006s, the
percentage
Europe 100 % for
females
and 90% for
males
, SSA at 10% for
males
and
females
at 20%,
while
in America Latin the
percentage
for male at 40% and female at 45%, and East Asia the
percentage
for
region
and
gender
male almost 50% and female at 45%. The
second,
Higher
Education
by
region
and
Gender
for Europe, the
percentage
for
males
40
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% and
females
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50 %, In SSA the
percentage
is 20 % for
males
and 15 % for
females
, In American Latin the
percentage
is different between percentages for higher
education
by
region
male and female is 30 % and 20%,
while
East Asia different
percentange
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percentage
percentages
between male or female as similarities but male higher. In conclusion, different secondary and higher
education
by
region
and
gender
most highest is Europe and and lowest is SSA.
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