Higher education can be funded in several ways including the following; 1. All costs are paid by the government. 2. All costs are paid by the student. 3. All costs are paid by the student using loan from the government that must be paid after graduation. Discuss the benefits of each option. Which one is the best?

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funded by the

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would be of great help to the pupil and their families.

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support would make sure more and more teenagers have an opportunity to go for higher

education

thereby making the world a better-educated place to live. The southern state of India is a prime example, where all undergraduates are encouraged to go to university with the support of

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panchayat office. To

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education

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the help of

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every illiterate can get a good

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there

will not be unemployment in the country.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Accessibility
Socio-economic background
Social mobility
Higher educated populace
Government budget constraints
Taxation issues
Personal responsibility
Financial stake
Inequity
Enrollment
Immediate financial burden
Future earnings
Long-term debt
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