Higher education can be funded in several ways including the following; 1. All costs are paid by the government. 2. All costs are paid by the student. 3. All costs are paid by the student using loan from the government that must be paid after graduation. Discuss the benefits of each option. Which one is the best?

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The task was not fully addressed as the essay did not discuss all three ways of funding higher education as required. To fully meet the task requirements, ensure that each part of the question is addressed comprehensively.

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Socio-economic background
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