In the future, nobody will buy printed newspaper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In
this
era, With
rapid
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advancing technology. In no time print media or
litreature
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literature
will
sease
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cease
to exist
due to
the
availabilty
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availability
of all those online and even without paying. I firmly
belive
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in
this
notion, And in
forthecoming
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the upcoming
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passage
i'll
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explain the fact that it will reduce the
expence
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expense
expenses
and prevent
waste
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the waste
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of natural
resource
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resources
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as well as
it is easily
accessable
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accessible
.
To begin
with, Producing printed
books
and
newspaper
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newspapers
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requires
lot
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a lot
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of resources and money. From the production to delivery of any document there are many people,
mechinery
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machinery
machines
and materials
are
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needed which
requires
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currency and
this
is recovered by
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the consumers
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consumers
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pocket. As time passes more and more people will gain access to digital media and they won't have to pay the
expence
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expense
expenses
.
For instance
, more folk will choose something which is available freely compared to something for which they have to pay. Another thing is that it is easy to access and carry one device in which you can store lots of
books
compared to
carry
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physical
books
which can be heavy and demand much space.
Such
as, Carrying one mobile is far more
convineant
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convenient
and easy to use
then
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than
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carrying ten
books
.
Additionally
, you can gain access to
news
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the news
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much
quickly
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more quickly
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and
wont
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won't
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have to wait for
newspaper
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the newspaper
a newspaper
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to come.
To sum up
,
Although
physical
newspaper
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newspapers
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and
books
are
conventional
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the conventional
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way
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ways
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of reading and
stay
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staying
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up to date with news. It will change with time
due to
easily
accessable
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accessible
digital
form
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forms
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and reduced
expences
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expenses
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of
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it
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apply
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Digital content
  • Environmental concerns
  • Tactile experience
  • Production costs
  • Distribution costs
  • Digital divide
  • Digital fatigue
  • Print media
  • Credibility
  • Permanence
  • Collectibility
  • Aesthetic value
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