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The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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The line chart illustrates how the rate of
Australian
exports
 to four
countries
 namely Japan,
US
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the US
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 ,
China
 and
India
 changed between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
,
It is clear that
 the proportions of
Australian
exports
 to
China
 and
India
 rose with the
exports
 to
China
 rocketed among all
countries
while
 the reverse patterns were seen in the figure for
other
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 two
countries
 declined. In terms of the percentage of
Australian
exports
 to
China
,
this
 figure started at under 5% in 1990, after which it gathered pace and
soar
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soared
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 to 25% in the next 20 years
then
 witnessing a slight growth, which climbed to a new peak of about 35 % and making
a the
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 highest rate of
Australian
exports
 to
China
 compared to the other three
countries
.
Although
 from 1990 to 2000, the figure for
India
 remained stable at around 1% but later significantly increased to about 7% in 2010.
However
, the end period
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shows
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 a downward trend in the proportion of
Australian
exports
 to
India
 at 5% Meanwhile, starting at roughly 26%, the rate of
Australian
product
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products
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 exported to Japan
then
losting
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losing
 momentum and shrank to about 18% in 2000 before experiencing a period of stability in the next 12 years.
The
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smiliar
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similar
 trend, to an equal extent, can be seen in
US
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the US
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,whose figures fluctuated between nearly 11% in 1990 and 5% in 2010 but
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later
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jumped
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 again
at
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 around 8% until 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, exports, countries, china, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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