The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar charts
depicts
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a
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countries' export in a
veriety
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variety
of industries of goods between 2015 and 2016. There are 6 reported categories:
petrolium
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petroleum
products
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, engineered goods, gems and jewellery, agricultural
products
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, and
textiles
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. The table illustrates the percentage change in
value
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in each
categories
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in the same years.
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, the majority of the markets increased in terms of
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except for merely one industry.
The petroleum
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Petroleum
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products
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the most valuable in both
year
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. Even though
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the
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textiles
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is
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the smallest in terms of
value
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,
but
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its
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rate of change was the highest among all the industries.
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the graph and the table, the most valuable market was petroleum
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which was at around 60.5 million
dollar
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, which
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appreciated to approximately 63.5 million
dollar
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in
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a year later. The appreciation
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occured
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occurred
with engineered goods, agricultural
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, and
textiles
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, which the market that
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in
value
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the most was
textiles
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(soared by 15.24 per cent).
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, depreciation occurs with gems and jewellery. It decreased by 5.18 per cent
amking
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making
its
value
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to be approximately 40.18% from 45.36%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words products, textiles, value with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • trend analysis
  • anomalies
  • percentage change
  • sector analysis
  • global demand
  • domestic production
  • economic conditions
  • technological advancements
  • international regulations
  • economic growth
  • trade relations
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