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The graphs below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given
graps
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graphs
grapes
graph
 provide information about present rates of secondary and higher education among the people in
number
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a number
the number
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 of
contries
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countries
 (Europa,
SSA
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,
Latin
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America
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,East
Asia
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,
America
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).
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,the
higest
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highest percentage
precentage
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 of
school-aged
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the school-aged
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population
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shoved
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 by
the
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apply
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Europa the least
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precentage
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percentage
 made by
SSA
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 and other regions -
such
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Latin
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America
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 and East
Asia
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- showed
smilliar
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similar
 rates. At the
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precentage
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percentage
 of
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adult
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the adult
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population
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population,
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 the range of the regions
do
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does
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changa dispate
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change despite
 of decrease
of
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in
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 the rate. The
population
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 of
school -aged
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school-aged
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population
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 in Europe
contains
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is
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 97
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precent
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per cent
 of
female
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females
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 and 90
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precent
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per cent
 of
male
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males
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. As a
comperison
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comparison
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Latin
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America
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American
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 and female East
Asia
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 school aged
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population
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populations
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 showed
same
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the same
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 45 percent ,
female
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and female
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Latin
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american
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American
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 and male East
Asia
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 school aged
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population
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populations
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 both showed 50
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precent
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per cent
. The
least
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last
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 bar of the chat made by
SSA
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, the male 10 female 20. The
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precentage
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percentage
 of the
adult
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population
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 in Europe is 50
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precent
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per cent
 of
fe male
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female
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 and 40
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precent
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per cent
 male. The
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precentage
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percentage
 of
male
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the male
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adult
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pupolation
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population
 in
Latin
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America
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Asia
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 is less
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then
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than
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 30
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precent
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per cent
, female
adult
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popultion
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population
 is lesser
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then
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than
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male
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males
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Latin
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in Latin
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America
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 (20%),
East
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and East
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Asia
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 (24).The least presentage of
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adult
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the adult
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population
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 made by
SSA
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male
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males
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 25
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precent
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per cent
 and
female
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females
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 20
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precent
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per cent
.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ssa, latin, america, asia, precentage, population, adult, precent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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