In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything, they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or dis agree?

Digitalization is one of the major advanced developments of the country.
This
trend evidently affects
the
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printed media like
newspapers
and
books
. In future,
people
will be able to access everything
from
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online
this
trend will prevent individuals from buying printed
books
as we as
newspapers
. I strongly agree with
this
statement because it is easy to avail as much details and data rather than buying different
books
for
huge
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amount. Almost every country in the world is trying to be digitalized in every sector to minimise
the
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time consumption and money.
Although
it is
also
reflected in
people
's habit of reading. Ten years ago reading
books
was quite expensive because
books
were only available in hard copies in shops.
Moreover
, everyone had the habit of buying
newspaper
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daily.
This
trend is gradually changing
due to
the
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online facilities. Some
people
usually carry
books
while
traveling
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though e-
books
play
vital
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role
to reduce
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extra
lauggage
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luggage
language
that
provides
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effortless
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travell
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travel
experience.
In addition
.in every house
people
usually buy
minimum
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one
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newspaper daily.
this
is one of the common
routine
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of Indian citizens
for instance
however
, online
newspapers
seek attention from the young generation with lots of new key features than traditional printed
onces
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ones
once
ounces
. Meanwhile, online news
are
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updated every minute
people
will stay updated without any delay
although
they can easily check details in different sources and many other wide varieties of
newspapers
without paying separately. In conclusion, in the future
people
will
depend
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online facilities for reading
books
and news details because it is more eco-friendly and flexible. In my
opinion
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it is more convenient for
people
to read everything online without much delay and
hence
the
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printed
books
and
newspapers
will be vanished in future.
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