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Question: The graph below shows the percentage of household using the internet in three different countries from 2010 to 2020

Question: The graph below shows the percentage of household using the internet in three different countries from 2010 to 2020
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The line graph demonstrates
about
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the percentage of households who use
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 in
Germany
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,
France
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 and The United Kingdom. The units are represented by
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an index
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 from 2010 to 2020.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the proportion of
internet
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users
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for
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France
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 and The UK saw upward trends over the span,
whereas
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 the opposite pattern could be observed in the case of
Germany
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,
decreased
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which decreased
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 substantially.
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 the share of
users
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of
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Germany
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 witnessed a negative trend over the whole period. Turning to details, we can see
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 tendencies in the figure for The UK and
France
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. The proportion of family
internet
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users
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 in
France
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 was 40% in 2010, which was the lowest number
at
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that year, and
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 figure rose slightly to 50% over the first half. Over the second half, continued
increasing
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 sharply to 90%.
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, the share of
internet
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users
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 in The UK saw a dramatic growth from 50% to 80% between 2010 and 2015, and
this
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 index declined minimally to 70% in the final year. If we look at
Germany
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, the rate of household social media
users
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 was just below 90%
in
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 the beginning year.
This
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 data experienced a moderate decrease to 50% over the whole span.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, germany, france, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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