It is often claimed that electronic devices will soon replace paper books. Do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that, in coming years electronic
devices
(e-
devices
) will
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place over
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traditional
hardcopy
books
. In
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I strongly believe
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the given statement for many reasons, which will be explained in detail with relevant examples.
To begin
with, Earlier people used to read
books
as a habit and eventually
paper
became part of life
However
, These days as the internet is advancing and humans are getting more comfortable using electronic
devices
making themselves more
comfortale
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comfortable
for their daily activities
such
as reading and
writting
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writing
compared to
paper
and notes.
This
is
due to
devices
such
as laptops, mobiles and tablets connected with the internet are now very easy to use and more accessible and can
use
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them for different
purpose
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just by a click away.
In addition
with
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this
, smart things are
considerd
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considered
as more durable than
paper
.
For example
, Youngsters are now using different
kind
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kinds
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of applications in
smart phones
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smartphones
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to plan their daily activities and tasks over
paper
moreover
, they can store all their important documents and necessary reading materials
at
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one place securely.
Thus
preferring
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e-
devices
over
books
On the other hand
,
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, Kids are
over smart
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and exploring new things in a fun learning way rather than normal
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textbooks
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books
from school. keeping
this
in mind educational institutions are now upgrading and implementing their subjects in tablets to represent them virtually and developing
intrest
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interest
among children.
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they feel comfortable without carrying different
books
in their bags
instead
they carry a tab which can used for
multi-purpose
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.
To conclude
, Smart
devices
help people in
numarious
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numerous
ways making their life easy and
comforable
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comfortable
with easy access
for
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any need without
use
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the use
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of
books
and playing a key role in the life of youngsters developing their visualising capabilities.
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