Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.
The important scientific discoveries are made on the basis of
an experiments
done on the animals. It is said an Correct the article-noun agreement
experiments
an experiment
I
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apply
njustice
to them, Correct your spelling
injustice
justice
however
without the experiment on them there is no way scientists can discover new things.
While
considering new inventions, for instance
, discovery
of a vaccine. It is Add an article
the discovery
intially
experimented on Correct your spelling
initially
the
animals followed by humans. All the risk associated with losing life is put on the Correct article usage
apply
ammals
. Correct your spelling
mammals
animals
This
is
one way or the other is not fair. Most of the people argue that it has to be outlawed and give rights to the animals.
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apply
Whatsoever
, when Rephrase
However
comming
to risking their own life everyone backs down. Verb problem
it comes
For example
, in 2020 when everyone feared dying of COVID
, some rejected Correct your spelling
COVID-19
COVID
vaccine even after the multiple experiments and trials Correct your spelling
the COVID-19
are
over.
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were
this
context, where Correct your spelling
people
prople
are ignorant
to get a jab after several successful trials, to go with other alternatives likeCorrect your spelling
people
,
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apply
experiment
on Fix the agreement mistake
experiments
human
cannot proceed at all. The only alternative can be, to experiment on Fix the agreement mistake
humans
the
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human
who can no longer survive like Fix the agreement mistake
humans
brain dead
patients. Add a hyphen
brain-dead
Such
experiments are ongoing and will continue with it. Other than that, as I have mentioned earlier there is
no possible ways to use as a test kid.
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To conclude
my writing I would say that human dominance on earth cannot be subdued by other creatures. Therefore
although
an injustice to them, for survival of pre, the preditor must be fed on them. Similarly
human survival needs their life for the purpose.Submitted by rinchennima77 on
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