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n many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The chart gives information about the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city Centre from 2003-2012. Despite increasing markedly between 2003 and 2004, There was a significant decrease of about 1000 units in burglaries till 2006. Having remained almost stable till 2005, the figure for car theft experienced an abrupt fall to almost 2000 units until 2006.
However
, figure in terms of robbery, It maintained almost the same
level
 at
this
 period of time. Afterwards, the number of people in burglary incidents continued to fall
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level
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 roughly 1100 number in 2008. Interestingly, both car theft and robbers remained nearly constant for 2 years.
Finally
, the burglary
level
 did not change to approximately 1500 units till the end of the period.
Similarly
, robbery kept its same
level
 at just over 500 between 2008 and 2012.
On the other hand
 car theft started to increase,
this
 figure being the most common type of incident in 2012
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