In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by fast food. This has negative impact on families, individuals, society. What extent do you agree or disagree?
In some countries, fast
foods
are being
popular, and it is replaced Verb problem
becoming
from
traditional Change preposition
by
food
. This
has more negative impact on families, individuals and society
. Moreover
, it can develop disease, also
it is a costly Rephrase
apply
food
, and the factories of foods
pollute air
. Add an article
the air
However
, this
has also
some possitive
view for Correct your spelling
positive
few
Correct article usage
a few
people
, who lives
in a hostel and can not Change the verb form
live
cooking
.
Change the form of the verb
cook
At
the beginning, Change the preposition
In
the
fast Correct article usage
apply
foods
are
the main Wrong verb form
were
causes
of diseases. Fix the agreement mistake
cause
For example
, intestinal obstruction, acute wattery
diarrhoea, gastrointestinal reflux disease (GERD) etc. may develop in those Correct your spelling
watery
people
, who take excessive fast food
on
their daily life. Change preposition
in
Similarly
, fast food
items such
as,
Remove the comma
apply
burger
, Fix the agreement mistake
burgers
sandwich
, pizza etc. are the most expensive for poor Fix the agreement mistake
sandwiches
people
. As a
result
, they could not effort
these Verb problem
afford
type
of Fix the agreement mistake
types
foods
on the outside. For example
, when a part of poor people
want
to go Change the verb form
wants
to
a long distance Change preposition
apply
then
, they want to eat this
type of food
on
their Change preposition
at
stop over
. Correct your spelling
stopover
However
, they may not effort
these Verb problem
afford
foods
due to
expensiveness. Correspondingly, in terms of fast foods
demand, the number of factories Change the noun form
food
are
developing day by day. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
As a
result
, these are the main reason
to pollute Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
environment
. The dust, stove smoke and garbage of the factories may pollute Add an article
the environment
river
, air etc. So, these are Fix the agreement mistake
rivers
the
harmful Change the article
apply
for
our Change preposition
to
society
.
On the other hand
, some people
think that,
fast Remove the comma
apply
foods
has some beneficial effects on our Fix the agreement mistake
food
society
. One part of pupils
, who Correct article usage
the pupils
lives
in a hostel, may not Correct subject-verb agreement
live
cooking
for themselves. Change the verb form
cook
be cooking
As a
result
, they can easily take their fast food
from restaurants. Because,
fast Remove the comma
apply
food
do
not need to Change the verb form
does
cook
. Just buy it and eat it.
Wrong verb form
be cooked
To conclude
that, I agree with this
view. We should take
more Verb problem
be
concerns
about traditional Replace the word
concerned
foods
. As a
result
, our new generation's children become healthier. In the same way, I think, fast food
has more effects on our families, individuals and society
in a negative way. So, every people
should prefer more traditional feeds than Fix the agreement mistake
person
the
fast Correct article usage
apply
food
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