The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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, with the development of technology and society, there are more and more kinds of jobs being created. Correct your spelling
Nowadays
People
often choose their career
based on their Fix the agreement mistake
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interest
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interests
ability
, living
condition,Correct word choice
and living
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people
think that a high salary
is the most important thing to consider when choosing a job
; I both agree and disagree with this
opinion due to
some reason
which will later be shown in Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
this
essay.
On the one hand, I agree with this
opinion because even if the job
fits people
's interests and their ability
but the Fix the agreement mistake
abilities
salary
is too low, it will be really hard to pursue and stick with. I do agree that a job
that fits people
's hobby and ability
will make
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give
people
have
more motivation to Unnecessary verb
apply
work
and also
won’t bore them as it’s their interest
afterall
. But if the Correct your spelling
after all
salary
is too little, they won’t have enough money required to fulfill their basic needs and they will have to work
extra or have a side job
to make enough income
for their needs. This
will take more time
, strength and endeavor
to develop their Change the spelling
endeavour
career
to a point that people
can really rely on to satisfy their need
which may end up making Fix the agreement mistake
needs
people
give up on their current job
to find a different one with a better income
. For example
, there is research that points out that more than 15-20% of new graduates realize they chose the wrong career
after working for a year and end up quitting their job
.
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jobs
On the other hand
, I disagree with the opinion that high income
is the most important consideration when choosing a career
because a job
with a high salary
yet without preference or requiring more ability
than people
actually have can hardly become a lifelong career
. Although
the job
’s income
can fulfill
basic needs or even more Change the spelling
fulfil
but
without Remove the conjunction
apply
interest
in the job
, people
will soon feel bored doing the same thing day to day. Moreover
, if the work
requires more skill and knowledge than people
actually help then
they wouldn’t
do it perfectly or even if they can do it it will cost extra Correct your spelling
won’t
time
and effort. After a long time
, people
will find the work
boring, hard, time consuming
despite the fact that it has a high Add a hyphen
time-consuming
salary
and end up giving up the career
. For example
, if people
choose a job
with a high salary
with passion and out of their ability
, they will just try to finish it and not devote themselves to it and as a result
, there will be no career
advancement and people
will soon be fed up with doing the same things every day without interest
which will lead to the lack of concentrate and motivation in their job
, lowing the work
progress,......
In conclusion, I think a high income
is an important consideration when choosing a job
but personal interest
and ability
are also
as important as it. Missing one of these when choosing a career
will lead to many errors and may make people
hate their job
or even give up on it.Submitted by nguyentrungtri18012007 on
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