The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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, with the development of technology and society, there are more and more kinds of jobs being created.

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often choose their

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career

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careers

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based on their

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interest

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interests

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ability

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living

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condition,

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Some

people

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think that a high

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is the most important thing to consider when choosing a

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; I both agree and disagree with

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which will later be shown in

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opinion because even if the

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fits

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's interests and their

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but the

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is too low, it will be really hard to pursue and stick with. I do agree that a

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that fits

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's hobby and

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people

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more motivation to

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won’t bore them as it’s their

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afterall

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after all

. But if the

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is too little, they won’t have enough money required to fulfill their basic needs and they will have to

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extra or have a side

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to make enough

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for their needs.

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will take more

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to develop their

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to a point that

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can really rely on to satisfy their

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which may end up making

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give up on their current

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to find a different one with a better

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, there is research that points out that more than 15-20% of new graduates realize they chose the wrong

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after working for a year and end up quitting their

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job

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, I disagree with the opinion that high

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is the most important consideration when choosing a

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because a

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with a high

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yet without preference or requiring more

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than

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actually have can hardly become a lifelong

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the

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’s

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can

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basic needs or even more

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without

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in the

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people

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will soon feel bored doing the same thing day to day.

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, if the

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requires more skill and knowledge than

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actually help

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they

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won’t

do it perfectly or even if they can do it it will cost extra

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and effort. After a long

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people

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will find the

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boring, hard,

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time consuming

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despite the fact that it has a high

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and end up giving up the

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, if

people

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choose a

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with a high

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with passion and out of their

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, they will just try to finish it and not devote themselves to it and

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, there will be no

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advancement and

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will soon be fed up with doing the same things every day without

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which will lead to the lack of concentrate and motivation in their

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, lowing the

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progress,...... In conclusion, I think a high

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is an important consideration when choosing a

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but personal

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and

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are

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as important as it. Missing one of these when choosing a

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will lead to many errors and may make

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hate their

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or even give up on it.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

financial security
job satisfaction
long-term happiness
personal fulfillment
financial stability
passion
quality of life
work-life balance
career advancement
societal impact
income disparity
material success
monetary compensation
wealth accumulation
economic well-being

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