Ownership of mobile phones has risen dramatically in recent years despite the potentially harmful effects they may have on health and the society. Governments should introduce measures to restrict ownership of mobile phones to those who need them for work. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Technology

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has

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flourished by leaps and bound in each and every field, especially

the

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apply

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communication, and

as a result

, these days mobile

phones

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phone

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possesion

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possession

has

been

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increased even if harmfully affects people,

therefore

, the authority should implement some measure to restrict the

possesion

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possession

phones

. I partially agree with

this

statement because it helps communicate to

others

and it contains many advanced features.

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essay shall discuss it briefly

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the following reasons.

To begin

with,

phones

can help to contact

others

which

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wherever you can talk to

others

this

gadget. It not only

help

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helps

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contact

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with

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others

but

also

uses for social media and browsing

internet

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the internet

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, people can obtain more information easily from

internet

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the internet

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through

mobiles

and within

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apply

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a fraction of seconds can get the around the world news too.

This

can

carry

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effortlessly wherever because it is a small object, folks can put

thier

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their

purse, dress pocket and handbag.

This

gadget

provide

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provides

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enormous benefits to the ownership of

phone

users.

Therefore

this

cannot

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be resticted

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resticted

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restricted

by the authority.

On the other hand

, these

mobiles

bring massive adverse to

the

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individuals namely health

issue

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issues

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because people are

being

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becoming

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addict

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addicted

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use

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using

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phones

, anytime they carry

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them on

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their

hand

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hands

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and watch,

consequently

eye sight

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eyesight

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problem

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problems

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might be increased.

For instance

frequently

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phone

users more

affect

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affected

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the eye sight

issue

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issues

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, especially children,

kids

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and kids

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wear

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have worn

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power

spects

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spectacles

since their childhood period.

Therefore

, the government should implement

the

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strict rules for increasing the ownership of

mobiles

such

as the authority may be

rised

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raised

the

phone

tax amount,

thus

phone's

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phone

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possession can be reduced.

To conclude

mobiles

are providing more benefits to the population like help to communication, carry on easily and browsing internet for getting news.

Although

this

can bring more adverse

effect

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effects

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hence

, the government should increase the

phone

tax in order to reduce the ownership of mobile

phones

Therefore

, I partially agree with

this

statement in the above-mentioned details. I hope

this

drives more benefits to society.

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