Ownership of mobile phones has risen dramatically in recent years despite the potentially harmful effects they may have on health and the society. Governments should introduce measures to restrict ownership of mobile phones to those who need them for work. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Technology
is
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has
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flourished by leaps and bound in each and every field, especially
the
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communication, and
as a result
, these days mobile
phones
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phone
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possesion
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possession
has
been
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increased even if harmfully affects people,
therefore
, the authority should implement some measure to restrict the
possesion
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possession
of
phones
. I partially agree with
this
statement because it helps communicate to
others
and it contains many advanced features.
This
essay shall discuss it briefly
in
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for
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the following reasons.
To begin
with,
phones
can help to contact
others
which
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wherever you can talk to
others
by
this
gadget. It not only
help
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helps
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contact
to
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with
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others
but
also
uses for social media and browsing
internet
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the internet
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.
For example
, people can obtain more information easily from
internet
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through
mobiles
and within
in
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a fraction of seconds can get the around the world news too.
This
can
carry
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effortlessly wherever because it is a small object, folks can put
thier
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their
purse, dress pocket and handbag.
This
gadget
provide
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provides
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enormous benefits to the ownership of
phone
users.
Therefore
,
this
cannot
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resticted
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restricted
by the authority.
On the other hand
, these
mobiles
bring massive adverse to
the
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individuals namely health
issue
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issues
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because people are
being
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becoming
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more
addict
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to
use
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using
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phones
, anytime they carry
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them on
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on
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their
hand
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hands
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and watch,
consequently
,
eye sight
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eyesight
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problem
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problems
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might be increased.
For instance
,
frequently
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phone
users more
affect
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affected
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the eye sight
issue
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issues
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, especially children,
kids
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and kids
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wear
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have worn
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power
spects
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spectacles
since their childhood period.
Therefore
, the government should implement
the
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strict rules for increasing the ownership of
mobiles
such
as the authority may be
rised
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raised
the
phone
tax amount,
thus
,
phone's
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possession can be reduced.
To conclude
,
mobiles
are providing more benefits to the population like help to communication, carry on easily and browsing internet for getting news.
Although
,
this
can bring more adverse
effect
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effects
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,
hence
, the government should increase the
phone
tax in order to reduce the ownership of mobile
phones
.
Therefore
, I partially agree with
this
statement in the above-mentioned details. I hope
this
drives more benefits to society.
Submitted by reanudeepan on

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