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some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. discuss both viewers and give your own opinion.

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some individuals present the view
children
 should be
teached
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taught
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 in
home
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the home
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.
whereas
, others think that they should learn in school. I strongly agree with the former opinion which the best place to learn the basis of
train
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the train
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 is home. on the one hand, some people justifiably agree that
parents
 are able to train
children
 to grow up as
a
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apply
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useful and good
person
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people
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 in society. it is certainly true that
parents
 are responsible
how
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for how
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 they treat their
children
. because
children
mimics
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 their
parents
' behaviour when they
bring
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are brought
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 up in the world.
on the other hand
, another group of people claim that learning in school should provide the best way of a good human being. they insist that
parents
 don't have enough time to teach. their
children
 since they work until night.
however
, I don't find
this
 argument convincing as most
parents
 are out but they should provide a plan to do their role in
a
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approperiate
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appropriate
 well. it means they should be able to be a good worker and
a
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apply
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good
parents
 ,
simultenously
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simultaneously
.
to conclude
, in my view , the
effective
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 and
inspired
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 one in life is the behaviour of
parents
. the
children
 spend a lot of time with them. since they try to mimic from an early age till they are growing up.
moreover
,
parents
 can design a plan to do their responsibility
as well as
 do their work.
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