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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governmentsand individuals do to address these problems?

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It is true that
people
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 in the world are polluting
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environment
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the environment
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. There are a number of
problem
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problems
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have
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that have
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 resulted from
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 tendency and they should be
tacked
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tackled
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 by a number of effective
solution
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solutions
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 from individuals and
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government
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the government
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. The main issue is that a huge number of
emission
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emissions
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from
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apply
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have released gas emissions for decades
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 and have brought out carbon dioxide gas into the atmosphere.
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 results in a greenhouse gas effect and will make the planet hotter. Another worrying trend is deforestation. Because many
people
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 lack a place to live, so they choose the
medthod
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method
 that
cut
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cuts
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 down
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a tree
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tree
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trees
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 to
buit
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build
house
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houses
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. Not only do they destroy forests to build houses
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, but
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many
people
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also
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 burn forests for farming.
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 leads to ecological imbalance, many animals and plants are at risk of extinction Since
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prolems
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problems
 are serious, both the
government
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 and
individual
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individuals
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 should take
step
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steps
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 immediately to solve
these problem
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this problem
these problems
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.
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first,
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The
government
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 needs to issue laws on waste released into the
environment
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.
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, heavy sludge in cases of violation of discharge of untreated water and exhaust gases into the
environment
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. The
government
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 should encourage
people
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 to plant forests by organizing green campaigns to raise awareness of forest protection .
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, each individual must
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 raise their own awareness to keep the
environment
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 clean and green. In conclusion, there are various negative consequences of pollution and appropriate steps need to be taken to tackle and address
there
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their
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 problem. Not only the
government
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 but
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 individuals need to be conscious of protecting the
environment
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 and will be better if everybody
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 has to joint hand act

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