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In some country, more people are choosing to live alone. Do you think it has positive or negative effects on them?

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Nowadays, a lot of
people
 live single rather than live with someone. And there are
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some positive and negative sides. In my opinion, that trend may be
worst
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 for our society. In some countries
people
who
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live loyal. It can cause different disadvantages, like to decrease
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 population in
world
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. It means, that when
people
 live alone and do not meet someone like another gander, humans do not date and
then
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cause
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decries
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of
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 population.
For example
, in some Europe countries and in Japan overpopulation is declining because humans do not want merry and some
people
 want to build their own
career
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. In short,
that
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 ways can be
worst
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 for their nations
Also
,
people
 can feel different disadvantages and a lot of physical
damages
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 in their
life
.
Therefore
,
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every
people
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person
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need
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the
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support from other
people
, like
from
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parents, wife or husband, children
and
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etc. If
people
 do not give
like
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that
supports
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 and do not speak from others they can easily fall
the
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stress
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 and can join a wrong
life style
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lifestyle
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.
As a result
, in some countries increasing different worst accidents, like
suicidal
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, vandalism,
robbering
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robbery
robbing
 and etc.
Moreover
,
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 black sides of
people
’s nature only be negative for our
life
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. In conclusion, today
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 alone can cause
damages
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for
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 society and have a
deffendly
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definitely
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every one
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. I think
ever one
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everyone
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 should live with
some one
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someone
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 and should create
the
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qualitier
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quality
life
.
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coherence cohesion
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Support your main points with detailed explanations and examples. Each paragraph should revolve around one main idea and include evidence or examples to back up your points.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • firstly
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  • thirdly
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  • moreover
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  • despite

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