Some people feel that it is better to live in the city while others believe that life better in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Many
people
believe that living conditions in
cities
are better than
rural
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in rural
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areas.
However
, there is another group of
people
who think that
life
in
countryside
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the countryside
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is
a
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apply
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way better than
urban
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in urban
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places
. I believe that it's impossible to live in
cities
without a job or an own
bussines
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business
.
This
essay intends to analyze both views
along with
my perspective.
Firstly
, those who believe that
life
in megapolises is the best option to live have several reasons. One of them is the public transport system,
due to
the lack of developed public transport in
countryside
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the countryside
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people
are very dependent on their cars to get around but in
cities
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cities,
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people
aren't faced with public transport problems and they
didn't
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have to get a car just to go to their work. Another advantage urban
life
is there
is
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are
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a lot of
places
such
supermarkets
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as supermarkets
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and hospitals and you don't have to walk several
kilometers
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kilometres
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to find them which is usually
happened
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happening
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in rural areas.
On the other hand
, there are
also
a bunch of disadvantages of city
life
so
people
just prefer to spend their lifetime in
countryside
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the countryside
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. The first reason for
this
is
the
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that
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rural areas have less air pollution than
cities
because there are
less
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fewer
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factories and vehicles that contaminate the the.
Also
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Also,
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there are less density and less congestion
comparing
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compared
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to urban
places
. The third but at the same time a very important one is the sense of community in
slow pace
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slow-paced
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places
.
For example
,
the
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people
who live in
countryside
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the countryside
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are more polite and communicative than
people
who live in
cities
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