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he table reprisents how much was the pilice budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain and where that many came from and charts give information how it was used.

he table reprisents how much was the pilice budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain and where that many came from and charts give information how it was used.
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The table
reprisents
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represents
 how much was the
pilice
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police
 budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain and where that
many
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money
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 came from and
charts
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the charts
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 give information
how
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on how
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 it was used. One of the crucial
source
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sources
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 of
budget
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the budget
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 was
national
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the national
a national
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 government in both
year
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years
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. In 2018 in every source there
is
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were
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a
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apply
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positive
changes
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change
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 and
total
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the total
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 amount of
money
is
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apply
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increased by 13.9 m. As we see local taxes grew
up
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apply
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almost by 10 in a
year
 ,
on the contrary
, other sources were almost similar in both
year
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years
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,
as well as
 in
case
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the case
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 of
national
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the national
a national
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 government.
Main
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The main
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 part
on
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of
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charts
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the charts
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 of
money
 spent is salaries for officers and staff,
however
,in 2018
amount
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the amount
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 of spent
money
was
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apply
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decreased by 6
percent
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per cent
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. Unlike
salaries
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the salaries
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 part,
spent
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the spent
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money
 on technology
was
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apply
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almost doubled in one
year
. And
last
 but not least,
money
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the money
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 amount which was spent in order to take care of buildings and transport was almost
same
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the same
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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