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The chart below shows literacy rates in several different countries around the world.

The chart below shows literacy rates in several different countries around the world.
the chart below illustrates the literacy rates in four nations and the world.
overall
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, it is clear to see that the
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proportion
 of
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,
as well as
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female
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females
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 and total
propotion
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proportion
, is the highest value.
Country
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 C hold the second highest value, meanwhile, nation A
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 the lowest figure. The percentage of
female
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females
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 and
male
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 in
country
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 D was 99%, which dominated other countries in the chart. Having the same trend,
country
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 C's female rate started at 86.9% and that of
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 was 93.9%.
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,
country
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 A
hold
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 the lowest rate at 3 catalogues, which was 47.8%, 63.5% and 32.7% respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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