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Some people believe that people who read books can develop more immigration and language skills than those who prefer to watch tv to extent you agree or disagree

#people #books #immigration #language #skills #tv
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Some people believe that many people can read
books
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and develop
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 more immigration and language skills than
who
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those who
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 prefer to watch tv l talk
this
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I
agree
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agree on
agree to
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this
 statement I like to
the
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read
books
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reading
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Reading
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the
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books
 is my hobby.I like many nawls hbv
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high
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had
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chaff
dert
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dirt
dart
books
 fighting you watched that you know of any kind of
claming
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claiming
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coherence cohesion
The essay you submitted is not organized in a coherent manner. It lacks a clear introduction, a structured body, and a conclusion that summarizes your opinion. The sentences seem disjointed, which makes it difficult to follow your line of reasoning. It also includes a significant amount of unintelligible text with no clear connection to the argument being presented.
task achievement
The essay does not sufficiently address the task. Your response must directly answer the question by agreeing, disagreeing, or partially agreeing with a clear explanation of your opinion. Provide well-developed arguments with relevant examples to support your position. The response provided here does not present a complete thought and fails to engage with the topic effectively.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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