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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this?

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In time gone by , residents become
intrested
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interested
 in finding out about the history of
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house
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the house
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 or building they live in .
This
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 essay will examine the main causes of living in historical places and possible solutions to 
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 problem .
Firstly
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, the two main reasons
of
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for
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historical
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the historical
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 meaning of houses are historical knowledge and
humans
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curiositys
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curiosity
curiosities
.
In addition
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 ,
people
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 who are interested in history
on
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 their
life
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lives
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 are likely to purchase a
house
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 or building with historical story and meaning .
In other words
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 , individuals can feel the old and vintage atmosphere .
Furthermore
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 , human curiosity is
also
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 the biggest cause for getting information about a place .
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 ,if
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people
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 live in the old and historical
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house
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houses
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 they can satisfy their curiosity and satisfy themselves . One clear example is ,
someone
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that someone
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 who loves history may want to stay in
historical
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a historical
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house
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 or building when they go 
to
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the
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 vacation.
On the other hand
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 , there are some
way
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ways
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 to research
to
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this
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 problem.
This
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 could be discovering new historical books and asking
people
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 who
knows
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 about that place . Discovering new historical books
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documenteries
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documentaries
 can present lots of information about
building
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the building
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 has story.
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the library
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library
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library,
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 you can easily find a book about
historical
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the historical
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 location who stayed in and what they do in that building . Another way to research method is
asking
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by asking
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 local
people
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 who know about the site .
Socieities
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Societies
 usually create chat websites to discuss historical buildings they live
and
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 what are they experiencing. In conclusion,
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people
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 who
learning
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 different things about where they live
in
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and
purposed
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 several solutions . It is possible to find out historical places by searching in different areas.

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task achievement
Ensure that the essay directly addresses the question prompt. The introduction should clearly state the reasons why people are interested in the history of their buildings, avoiding any tangential or unrelated content. You need to focus on answering 'what are the reasons for this' rather than exploring solutions or other aspects not requested by the task.
task achievement
Develop clear paragraphs with specific main ideas supported by detailed examples or explanations. Each paragraph in the body of the essay should begin with a clear topic sentence, followed by development that is relevant to the topic. The provided examples should be directly linked to the main point and should clearly demonstrate the reasoning behind the interest in historical residences.
coherence cohesion
Organise the essay with a logical structure, providing clear progression throughout. Begin with an introduction that sets the topic and ends with a thesis statement. Follow with body paragraphs that each cover a single main idea related to the prompt and conclude the essay by summarizing the main points or restating the thesis in light of the body content. Use cohesive devices such as linking words and phrases appropriately to signal the relationship between ideas.
coherence cohesion
Focus on correcting grammatical errors and improving sentence structure to allow for a coherent and cohesive flow of ideas. Pay special attention to verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions. Sentence variety and complexity can enhance the overall quality of the essay.
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