Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss bth views and give your opinion.

Some school of thought believes that all nations should fight against environmental
issues
with cooperation
whereas
others consider that each country should solve its own problems. From my point of view dealing with environmental
prblems
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problems
globally is the most effective way,
although
, national attempts might work. Admittedly, a nation can tackle
sme
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some
issues
related to the environment but not all of them.
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Some
local problems,
such
as air and water pollution can be addressed in
certain
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a certain
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country
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countries
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. When
government
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the government
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establish laws to protect
environment
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the environment
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,
such
issues
can
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in
short
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a short
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period of time.
For example
, if people throw rubbish
to
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rivers, they should be fined for
this
, and the next time they will
do
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not commit the same mistake again.
However
, there are major
issues
that require global efforts to be solved, climate change,
for instance
. There are large factories and countless cars around the
worls
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world
which emit toxic gases that
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been a cause
for
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of
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climate change. If a single country
close
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all its factories and
ban
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bans
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driving
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cars, there will be
emissins
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emissions
despite huge efforts. Since contiguous nations still producing emissions.
For example
, a decade
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ago
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Aral
sea
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started to exsiccate,
only
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and only
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Uzbekistan and Kazakhstan tried to solve
this
problem. Unfortunately, these two countries could not tackle the issue,
therefore
, now it is more dangerous for inhabitants around there,
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place become completely invalid. If all nations cooperate to deal with
Aral
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the Aral
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problem, it might not affect the whole earth. In conclusion, it is usually better to fight against environmental problems on a
gbobal
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global
scale and sometimes on a national level.
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