The Pie Charts Show The Main Reasons for Migration to And from The Uk in 2007

The Pie Charts Show The Main Reasons for Migration to And from The Uk in 2007
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Two pie charts
represent
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show
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why
people
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migrate
Wrong verb form
migrated
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to and from the
UK
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in 2007.
It is clear that
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the major
reason
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for immigration and
emigration
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is
definite
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a definite
the definite
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job. Formal study contributed the second largest percentage of immigration, but for
emigration
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, it held the lowest share. In
term
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terms
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of definite
job
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jobs
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,
this
Linking Words
reason
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accounted for 30% of immigration, holding the biggest portion.
This
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figure was quite similar for
emigration
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, nearly
on
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one
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third of the total number. The number of
people
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leaving
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UK
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the UK
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for
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apply
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looking for work made up 22%, just over
one fifth
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one-fifth
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.
This
Linking Words
percentage was approximately double that of
people
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moving to
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UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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for finding
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to find
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job
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a job
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. About
formal
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the formal
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study, it made up the second largest percentage of the reasons for coming to
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UK
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the UK
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, just over a quarter.
In contrast
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, the
people
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moving out
for
Linking Words
this
Linking Words
reason
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contributed nearly 5%, taking up the lowest
percent
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percentage
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of
emigration
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.Regard no
reason
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stated, for migration from
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UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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,
this
Linking Words
factor held 18%, which was three times as much as the portion of
people
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coming to
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UK
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the UK
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for
Linking Words
this
Linking Words
reason
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,

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "for this reason".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, uk, reason, emigration with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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