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The Pie Charts Show The Main Reasons for Migration to And from The Uk in 2007

The Pie Charts Show The Main Reasons for Migration to And from The Uk in 2007
#show #migration #uk
Two pie charts
represent
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 why
people
migrate
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 to and from the
UK
 in 2007.
It is clear that
 the major
reason
 for immigration and
emigration
 is
definite
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a definite
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 job. Formal study contributed the second largest percentage of immigration, but for
emigration
, it held the lowest share. In
term
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terms
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 of definite
job
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jobs
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,
this
reason
 accounted for 30% of immigration, holding the biggest portion.
This
 figure was quite similar for
emigration
, nearly
on
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one
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 third of the total number. The number of
people
 leaving
UK
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the UK
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for
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apply
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looking for work made up 22%, just over
one fifth
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.
This
 percentage was approximately double that of
people
 moving to
UK
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the UK
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for finding
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to find
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job
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a job
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. About
formal
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the formal
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 study, it made up the second largest percentage of the reasons for coming to
UK
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the UK
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, just over a quarter.
In contrast
, the
people
 moving out
for
this
reason
 contributed nearly 5%, taking up the lowest
percent
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 of
emigration
.Regard no
reason
 stated, for migration from
UK
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the UK
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,
this
 factor held 18%, which was three times as much as the portion of
people
 coming to
UK
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the UK
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for
this
reason
,
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "for this reason".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, uk, reason, emigration with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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