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The best way to improve health is to exercise daily. Do you agree or disagree.

#health #exercise
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workout
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 in order to stay fit and for holistic growth. I
Strongly
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 believe that
this
 is a prudent approach but there
is
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are
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another steps
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can
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 be taken to shape the
body
. To embark on,
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most
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 powerful argument in favour of doing exercise is preventing
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from
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obesity. To elaborate
it
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, by doing exercise daily, individuals can maintain
physique
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their physique
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 very well as
body
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the body
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 does movement as it releases
fall off
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 calories. Not only, averts
body
 fat but
also
, mentally beneficial. To be more precise,
workout
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working out
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 is
prove
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proven
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 helpful for
healthiness
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the healthiness
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 of
mind
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the mind
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 eventually it
form
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people
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optimistic
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 and an optimistic individual
end
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 up with more productive and innovative thinking. ostensibly, there
is
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are
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another steps
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another step
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can
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that can
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 be taken to improve
the
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apply
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health.
first
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 alternative is taking
rich
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a rich
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 nutrition
diets
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diet
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. To explicate it,
actually
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 most of
healthiness
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the healthiness
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 is based on proper
diets
 but every meal cannot assume all ingredients with are important for
bady
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baby
body
 so they should take rich nutrition
diets
 in order to prevent from deficiency
such
 as supplements. Some finding asserts that
vegetarians
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vegetarians'
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diets
are
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do
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 not assume
much
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many
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 ingredients so they have to take pills
for
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to
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 fulfill
the
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their
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body
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body's
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 needs
To conclude
it
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, I would like to reiterate by saying that doing exercise is
healthier
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a healthier
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 approach
for
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overall
 well-being and mental development but there
is
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are
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 more alternatives
can
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 bring fruitful results.
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coherence cohesion
While you presented your viewpoint on the significance of daily exercise for health, it was not always clear or fluently developed. Aim to structure your sentences more effectively and ensure your points are logically sequenced.
task achievement
In terms of task response, you offered your opinion and addressed the prompt sufficiently. However, to fully meet the requirements, you should expand on your ideas with more focused and developed explanations and include a wider range of relevant examples to support your argument.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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