The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summariae the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summariae the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided chart depicts the proportion of electrical appliances
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by households in the two years
periods
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,
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the other illustrates the amount of time
consumption
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of
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housework in a particular country from 1920 to 2019. It can be clearly seen that there were various changes regarding the percentage of families’ electrical appliances and the number of hours of chorus per household experienced
downward
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trend.
According to
the initial chart, there was a
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figure in the proportion of families who used washing
machine
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as it increased dramatically from 40% (1920) to 70% (1960) and dropped to just under 70% in 1980.
However
, it
finally
reached its peak at nearly 80% in the final year.
On the other hand
, the same pattern showed in the percentages of households who owned
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and vacuum
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. They started at just under 10% and 30% respectively in 1920 and rocketed to 100% in the
last
two years. Meanwhile, looking
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the second chart, the number of time spent per
families
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per week
recorded
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at 50 hours in 1920 and decreased significantly to nearly 10 hours in the final year.
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