The graph below gives information about the sales of the three most commonly purchased items in a particular bakery for the year 2014.

The graph below gives information about the sales of the three most commonly purchased items in a particular bakery for the year 2014.
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The graph illustrates the total
sales
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of the bakery throughout the
year
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for general items acquired by consumers in 2014. It is evident that pie
sales
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increased gradually over the
year
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.
In contrast
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, bread and buns depict fluctuating monthly
sales
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. Bread
sales
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fell dramatically in the first quarter of the
year
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, dropping from 80
thousand
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in January to 45
thousand
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by March.
Sales
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then
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stabilized until the third quarter before rising steadily.
However
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, they experienced a decline towards the end of the period.
On the other hand
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, pie purchases increased gradually from 10
thousand
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in January to a slight rise of 20
thousand
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in the two-thirds of the
year
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, ending with a swift increment to 40
thousand
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by December. Meanwhile, consumer purchases of buns maintained steady growth until August, followed by a drastic fall
at the end
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of the period.
Therefore
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, the bakery experienced a loss in bun
sales
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by 110
thousand
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in the
year
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2014,
whereas
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sales
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of bread and pies remained considerable throughout the 
year
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, year, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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