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The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, between 2000 and 2010. Summarize information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, between 2000 and 2010. Summarize information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the yearly income of three bakeries in
london
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London
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 from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
,the line stayed
in
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constant in 2000-2005
of
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for
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 Robbie's Bakery and it
was decreasing
Wrong verb form
decreased
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 in Lovely Loaves,
on the other
hand
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hand,
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 it
was increasing
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increased
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 in Bernie's Buns. In terms of
the
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apply
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Robbie's Bakery after 2005
it's
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it
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 started growing up in 2010
they
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it
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 had over 100,000 and it is the highest earns of them in 2010,
however
,
in
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Bernie's Buns
bakery
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Bakery
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 it wasn't changed from 2003 to 2006
then
 it began peaking.
While
in
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apply
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Lovely Loaves
it was
Verb problem
has
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remain
Wrong verb form
remained
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 stable for the
last
 three years.
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