Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?
There are a variety of reasons why scientists experiment with
animals
ranging from cosmetic to behavioural and pharmaceutical. I believe that some of these are easier to justify than others but there are also
alternatives to animal testing that need to be developed further
.
One reason for testing on animals
is for the development of new cosmetics. This
sector has generated a great deal more criticism than others as it is much more superficial. Critics argue that these new products are largely unnecessary and that the suffering of animals
does not justify the end product. Furthermore
there are many cosmetics that have been developed without the need for animal tests.
Another of the most common reasons for animal testing is the development of new drugs. These drugs can Add a comma
Furthermore,
then
be used to treat both animals
and humans. Indeed, many chronic illnesses are now treatable because of animal testing and it is for
this
reason that proponents of animal testing argue that it is so vital. However
, this
is a subjective argument as it values the lives of humans above the suffering of animals
.
These arguments relate solely to animal testing, however
there are alternatives to Add a comma
however,
this
currently being researched. Over the last
few years
there have been scientific breakthroughs with regards to improvements in testing on cells and human tissue. If these were to be extended there would be no need for any Add a comma
years,
animals
to suffer. Another possibility is to use computer models to test new items.
In conclusion, for some people
the testing of pharmaceutical drugs on Add a comma
people,
animals
is entirely justified and appropriate. Although
I would agree with this
to an extent and would argue that human lives are more important than animals
, I also
think that the alternatives to animal testing need to be further
developed.Submitted by abeera2012 on
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