Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion?

Cinema enjoyers have a debate about whether people need to bring cellphones or tablets into the room since it can ruin the
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watching
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of
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sympathetic
to everyone. In
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these opinions.
Firstly
, some people bring their
phone
because they are preparing just in case some urgent thing happens, that can cause them to leave the cinema early.
For example
, if a family member suddenly
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help, it is very important to get the notification as soon as possible. Everyone should
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realize, not every watcher has the
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advantage
of not being disturbed outside of their working time.
For instance
,
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who work as a freelancer should be on their
phone
for 24 hours, and always be ready to work
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they get an opportunity. But,
on the other hand
, I
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relate to the opposite views, disagreeing about
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a lot of time a person who plays
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phone
annoy others around them.
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can caused by how bright their screen is, which can ruin the atmosphere inside the theatre. Even, some people are ignorant enough to play loud sounds from their tablets, and cause disadvantages for the whole room.
For example
, if you
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your social media with a
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volume, you can not fully enjoy the films and
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others
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. In conclusion, both perspectives have their own reasons.
Thus
, we should respect each other
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watching the film, and for those who bring cell
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, just keep it silent and be polite.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Mobile Viewing
  • Cost-efficient
  • Time-efficient
  • Personalized experience
  • Immersive
  • Cinematic experience
  • Surround sound
  • Collective experience
  • Technical superiority
  • Sensory experience
  • Social hubs
  • Cultural events
  • Distractions
  • Preservation
  • Filmmaking art
  • Cinematographic nuances
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