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IELTS Topics: Number 8. Some think that teenagers should follow older people’s rules. Others thinks that it is natural for them to challenge what older people say. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Whilst some
people
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 think that teenagers should
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strictly
 follow older's
rules
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, others have a contrary opinion about how they will naturally challenge the elder. I believe that a young individual do not need to stick to the old
rules
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 in their life
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 because many things are different now compared to some decades ago. On
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 hand,
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the eldery
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eldery
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elderly
 want
people
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 in their teenage years to just follow their
rules
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. Some of them claim that their ways are the 'correct' options among all.
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 can be caused by their ego and belief after many
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 and errors during their period. To make the youngster's personal life much easier, they often offer their opinions and
rules
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 to follow.
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, a teenager should study
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a specific subject only from the exact books with the same learning methods they used during their
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high school
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 days back
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, so the younger one can have the right source and study more efficiently.
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, there are some old
people
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accepting
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 the fact that teenagers would challenge them
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and
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 as a natural response at their stage of life.
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 completely fine
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 since youngster likes to explore plenty of things and
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 out
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which way is actually working for them. So, they let them
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chase freedom and not
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 tied to 'outdated'
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.
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, many parents nowadays let their child to follow their own
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while
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 picking a major at the university,
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 of just following other family opinions about which study can produce more money. In conclusion, I agree that teenagers should just follow their dreams and pursue what they want without being tied completely to old
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,
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 way they can learn and grow more as a person and
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 to compete with
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at
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their
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age
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coherence cohesion
Ensure you present a clear introduction and conclusion that state your view succinctly and cohesively. Focus on creating a more logical flow of ideas.
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Develop your main points more fully with relevant examples and explanations to substantiate your arguments. Ensure you cover both views and your own opinion throughout the essay.
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