In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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the ongoing issue that why a large of the world has been facing hunger regardless of the growing production of crops is still
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poor economic management and insufficient agricultural sharing between the supplying
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and those whose land quality does not allow enough cultivation. From there,
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the promoted export import relation. With regards to the underlying reasons for existing hunger despite the improving cultivation , it is easily seen that agricultural
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do not go hungry but the non-agricultural do.
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plays a noticeable part in the starvation. In Africa, whose land
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for lasting drought all year long, has not received enough food in vast areas except for big cities. Interviewed people reported that the national and regional economy is weak
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food importation. As a straightforward example
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resolution, South Korea managed to get over the massive hunger followed by the civil war by investing in the fashion clothing
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industry to boost their national economy. With that development, South
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were capable of large
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of imported food later on. In summary, though the starvation concern in many regions
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caused by nature, the resolution can be man-made when enough actions and considerations
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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