Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what coule be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

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significantly worldwide.In

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essay , I would like to mention

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the causes

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and suggest proper solutions to solve

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problem. On one hand , the most noticeable observation is that unemployment

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lead

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people to search

about

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money for

living

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, with the lack of

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having

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daily

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as food and house. So, people feel anger in

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life , being homeless

within

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climate

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crisis . That means , start to steal goods for

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of living . To solve

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problem,

government

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the government

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has to collect and classify them and provide suitable

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and support them and

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the

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annually .

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, another cause worth

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government

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has

not

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policy toward criminal

issuer

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instance

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rules and punishment which means every

peropn

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person

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and slab without any justice . As

result

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, chaos and unsafe

peopel

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people

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this

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cause has to be prevented

immedialty

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immediately

to preserve

community

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. Apparently, these days all countries are in

completion

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competition

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be developed

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one by

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regulations. In conclusion , I firmly support crime prevention.

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, from my

prespective

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poverty is the most factories that

leads

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people to do

any thing

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anything

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for money .

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development

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what coule be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

Your opinion

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