The graph belows shows the average daily sales of selected food items at the Brisk Cafe, by seasons.

The graph belows shows the average daily sales of selected food items at the Brisk Cafe, by seasons.
The bar chart compares the
totals
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number
of given food items sold in two different seasons at the Brisk Cafe.
Overall
, Hot
coffee
seem
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to be the most popular choice among
costumers
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in winter seasons,
whereas
Iced
coffee
proves to be the most
serves
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drink during the summer In the summer period, hot
coffee
has the biggest
number
in
sales
, with an average
75
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serving
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sold daily.
Following
this
, the
items
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with the second biggest
sales
was soup, with an average of 50
serving
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servings
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sold daily.
On the other hand
, salad and ice cream had an average daily
sales
of 25
serving
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each, and iced
coffee
had the lowest
number
of
sales
, with close to zero servings sold daily. The
sales
of numbers of each food were different in
summers
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summer
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from what they were in winter. Iced
coffee
sales
rose significantly to an average of 40
serving
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servings
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. The
items
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with
an
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second lead is ice cream, an average of 35 servings sold.
While
, hot
coffee
, was decreasing to just 30
serving
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servings
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sold per day. Soup and salad had the lowest
number
of
sales
, with 25
serving
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servings
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sold daily on average.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, coffee, sales with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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