Some people believe that charities should help people in need no matter where those people are in the world,Others feel that these organizations should only serve the people living in the country where they are based Discuss both sides and give your own view.
Other humans think that charity organisations should provide help to the population around the whole
world
, Use synonyms
however
, some believe that helpers must Linking Words
helping
only those in their nation.Change the verb form
help
be helping
Thus
, Linking Words
personally
I Add a comma
personally,
also
support the fact that Non-Governmental Organizations(NGOs) can give their money or clothes to those who are affected in the Linking Words
world
.
Use synonyms
To begin
with, charities must Linking Words
taking
care of all societies above the countries, whether Wrong verb form
take
its
Europe, Asia or Africa and Correct your spelling
it's
this
is because, as a Linking Words
nation
we are all equal.Add a comma
nation,
Furthermore
, though Africa is a poor continent, Linking Words
this
does not mean all things should go to that side, Linking Words
whereas
, in Linking Words
Europe
we can Add a comma
Europe,
also
find beggars and Linking Words
streets
children.Change the noun form
street
Moreover
, it is good to provide capital for them to survive and build their own houses because they don't have Linking Words
anymore
.An example to illustrate that Correct your spelling
any more
couldd
be my native country, there is always drought Correct your spelling
could
due to
a lack of rainfall, so if charity Linking Words
organisation
prefer to support only human beings in their place, others in my home city will suffer and even die.
Fix the agreement mistake
organisations
On the other hand
, it is a better idea to give a hand to Linking Words
who
Correct pronoun usage
those who
based
in their areas, Add a missing verb
are based
hence
, Linking Words
this
is more expensive to export Linking Words
equipments
and raw materials Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
such
as grain, shoes and blankets from one continent to the other.Linking Words
For instance
, Linking Words
population
in New Zealand when they Add an article
the population
feels
to accommodate those strugglers in Malawi, it takes about a month or more Change the verb form
feel
while
they use ships to transport goods in bulk.Linking Words
Linking Words
At
the end, it does not make sense because the money they spend on transportation will Change the preposition
In
doubled
the Wrong verb form
double
prizes
of those products in Malawi.
Correct your spelling
prices
To conclude
, the NGOs should help all human beings around the Linking Words
world
, Use synonyms
instead
of supporting only those in their Linking Words
motherland's
.In my opinion, I believe that, since there is unity among us, Change noun form
motherlands
so
we are supposed to be treated the same all over the Rephrase
apply
world
.Use synonyms
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