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You have a spare room in your Apartment that you would like to rent out to a student. Write a letter to your Student Accommodation Officer of local college and say 1. Where is your apartment located? 2. When will the room be available 3. What are the requirements for a student to stay?

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to bring to your notice that by
end
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 of next
month
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month,
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 I am
wiling
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willing
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 to rent my
apartment
. My
apartment
 is a 2BHK
apartment
 which is situated beside the university road in
ladhewali
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.
Moreover
, in that
apartment
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apartment,
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 there is already a
one
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apply
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student from your school
which
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who
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 is living over there and he had requested me to give
this
apartment
 to someone who is working in your school. As per
request
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the request
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 received from that student living over there, I want a clean, nice guy who
eat
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 vegetarian food and should belong to our community because it will be easier for that guy to have
an
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apply
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effective communication with
that
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 new people. I look forward to hearing back from you at the earliest.
Your
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Yours
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 faithfully Ajay Kumar Sharma
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coherence cohesion
Make sure your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph should have a clear purpose.
coherence cohesion
Always use appropriate greetings and closing statements in a letter. In this case, a more formal salutation and closing salutation would be suitable.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains one main idea or point related to the question to enhance the structure of the letter.
task achievement
Refer directly to all bullet points in the task. Provide more specific details for each point to fully address the task requirements. For example, mention the exact location and any amenities of the apartment.
task achievement
Use a more formal tone suitable for writing to an official or institution. Avoid casual language and maintain professionalism throughout the letter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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