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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same to periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same to periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The data below provides information on how many
people
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 visited the Ashdown
Museum
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 in
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year
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the year
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 prior to and the
year
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 after its renovation and the response to a
survey
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 of visitor satisfaction in the same two years.
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, the number of visitors and satisfaction proportion increased in the
year
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 after the
museum
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 was refurbished. There were 74000
people
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 who visited the
museum
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 and responded to the
survey
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 in the
year
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 prior to the refurbishment.
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 number increased to 92,000 in the
year
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 following redevelopment. Moving to the visitor response towards the
survey
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, those who rated their experience as "dissatisfied" contributed to the greatest proportion of 40% in the
year
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 before refurbishment, which significantly declined to 15% in the
year
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 after the
museum
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 was refurbished. The percentage of
people
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 who were " very dissatisfied" declined from 10 to 5 during the given years. The number of visitors who were "satisfied" with the
museum
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 in the
year
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 before redevelopment was 30%, but the proportion increased to 40 after the
museum
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 refurbishment. 35% of tourists who visited in the
year
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 after refurbishing the
museum
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 rated their experience as "very satisfied".
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, there were 5% of
people
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 who did not respond to the
survey
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 in both the given years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, museum, year, survey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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