IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

The table shows the amount of money given to developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010. (Figures are in millions of dollars). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the amount of money given to developing countries by the USA, EU countries and other countries from 2006 to 2010. (Figures are in millions of dollars). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#amount #money #countries #usa #eu #figures #millions #dollars #summarise #information #features #comparisons
A glance at a table chart provided reveals the amount of money given in support of technology
oò
Correct your spelling
to
 thriving countries, measured in
billion
Fix the agreement mistake
billions
show examples
, between 2006 and 2010.
Overall
, there was a progressive growth pattern witnessed in all data. In terms of the total financial, commencing at 15.7, it experienced a vigorous and relentless growth to 24.3 after a 3-year period of time before increasing slightly to 30 in the
year end
Add a hyphen
year-end
show examples
. With regard to the amount of money from the US, it started at approximately 10 in 2006 which
then
 accelerated dramatically to its peak of nearly 23 after 4 years. As for that of both the EU and other countries,
although
 they had a comparatively homogeneous initial point at around 3 in 2006, they observed distinct levels of growth.
While
 the former underwent a
constantly
Change the word
constant
show examples
 marginal hike to exactly 4, the latter continuously grew to higher than 3 from 2006 to 2010.
Submitted by hominhtrang995 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
▼

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: