Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Discipline
plays a vital role in every
individuals
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life, but beating
children
on
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the name of
discipline
is not a good thing.
However
, some people believe that physical
punishment
is the best way to make their
child
well mannered
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.
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essay intends to elaborate on the reasons why I completely disagree with the statement, in upcoming paragraphs.
Parents
think that smacking infants will help to raise a disciplined human being because
punishment
gives them
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long lasting
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pain and in order to avoid
punishment
children
will behave properly.
Moreover
, elder people
says
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that if there
will be
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no beating or smacking,
children
will be fearless and
would
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do unethical things
such
as drugs.
For instance
, an article published, in The Hindu newspaper revealed that spoiled
children
are more likely to get involved in criminal activities.
Thus
, all of these reasons have made
parents
believe in the power of smacking. On the flip side, beating
children
for the sake of
discipline
is completely unacceptable. Young people are very sensitive, so smacking can
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their mental health which
further
leads to depression and anxiety issues. Adding to
this
, the infants will start disliking their
parents
and there is a possibility that they might run away from their house.
Instead
of loving their
parents
,
child
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children
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will be afraid of them.
For example
, a survey was conducted by Colombian University, USA, in 2021, which showed that the ratio of psychological issues among
children
is mounting by 11% every year.
Overall
, the idea of punishing
child
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is illogical.
To sum up
, it can be analyzed from the above discussion that
why
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physical
punishment
is never a good way to raise a
child
. In my opinion,
lesson
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the lesson
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of
discipline
should be taught be love and care.
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